Rewrite the following paragraph to emphasize ideas, to show connections among ideas, and to make the writing smooth. Note that often a spell/grammar checker will not catch these problems. Change some of the simple sentences to compound and complex sentences. You may choose to leave some sentences as they are. Share your revision as instructed by your professor.

Example: There are many volcanoes in the United States. Most of them are inactive. Some of them still erupt at rare intervals.

Rewrite: There are many volcanoes in the United States, and most of them are inactive; nevertheless, a few of them may still erupt at rare intervals.

Mount St. Helens

     Mouth St. Helens is located in the State of Washington in the Pacific Northwest of the United States. There was a violent eruption there on May 18, 1980. More than fifty people died. Tremendous damage occurred in the surrounding area. A wall of steam, water, and ash rolled down the mountain. It flattened trees and killed every living thing it touched. The eruption was over. Mount St. Helens was more than one thousand feet shorter. Another volcano in California, Oregon, Washington, or another state may erupt in the future. It would have a far-reaching effect. A big eruption in the West could leave an inch or more of ash as far east as Boston and New York City. No one knows when one of these volcanoes might erupt again. Eruptions in South East Asia are happening all the time.

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